I really like your art style. I think the big wall of text, in the beginning, is scaring away people. Maybe try to let the player figure out the background story bit by bit or just cut it down. There are also some small typos (""a missing in "ability" for example). Lastly, I recommend not being so explicit with what the outcome of your action will be (lead to Ending 3 or Ending 4) as it breaks the immersion! Keep it up :)
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I really like your art style. I think the big wall of text, in the beginning, is scaring away people. Maybe try to let the player figure out the background story bit by bit or just cut it down. There are also some small typos (""a missing in "ability" for example). Lastly, I recommend not being so explicit with what the outcome of your action will be (lead to Ending 3 or Ending 4) as it breaks the immersion! Keep it up :)
Thank you for patiently playing this game and your comment! They're kind and helpful :)